When I was in 6th grade, Zack didn’t know how to swim so he lied to me. The story started when Mr. David gives us the swimming test. For me it’s like eating a cake, but for Zack, it was like flirting with girls.
In the evening before the test, me and Zack talked about it, it was so exciting for me because I like sports. The next day, I brought my stuff and gears for the test, so did Zack. He told me that he will kick my butt when we have a swimming competition, and we had lots of jokes about swimming. We got on a bus and I was so rush about getting to the pool, it’s because one period is so short. When we arrived, the pool looks clean like girls rooms. Right after we arrived, Mr. David told us to change. Zack looked nervous like me when I forgot to study for my test. When Mr. David taught us how to float on water, Zack told me that he can float on the water in a really long time. At first, I thought he wasn’t kidding about that. So I challenged him, and he said he doesn’t want to because he wanted to save it for the test. So I swam away and had fun with my other friends, and every time I look at Zack, he always plays with the water and he never swims. Suddenly, a lightning came in my head and I started to think that Zack is lying, because everything he tells me make my conclusion is better. Then I just waited a long time after we warmed up, so Mr. David will gather us up and test us about swimming, I was hoping Zack didn’t lie to me cause usually, lying will get people in trouble. Mr. David called four students each time, and he tests us. I was very excited and I want Zack to prove what he told me was real. Ten minutes at that time was like 2 hours. When we were waiting for Mr. David, Zack asked me how to show him that I can float on water, he pretended that he knows how to, but he doesn’t. Zack is like a student model for me, and he’s my best friend. I thought that he would never lie for things like this, and I wasn’t sure that I was right, it supposed to be a guess, and I think that he won’t lie to me about stuff like this. We were best friend since the earth was round. Then finally, the moment has come, my name was next to Zack’s, so Mr. David called us out as the same time with other two girls. When we swam out to the two meters water height, Zack climbed up and ran to the one hundred and eighty water heights. When the test starts, Zack was pretty good at floating, but after ten seconds, he drowned, he also pulled my swimming pants off, he was strong like The King of Olympus, I can’t push him out, because I was too panic and also, my pants almost got rib off, it was horrible when you can’t think of anything when you are panic, It makes people scare. When I almost out of oxygen, I decided to give Zack a “rocket punch”, his nose was really red, and blood came out of his nose and mouth, It wasn’t a smart choice but that choice saved my life. Then he fell of me, after that, I swam away from him like a person swims away from a shark. I went up and shouted “HELP”, and then I took a really deep breath and swam down to help Zack out. I was so afraid that he will grab me again so I decided to punch him square in the back. Zack was in a serious pain, and then I carried him up. Mr. David said that it was a smart choice to make, and I got extra point because I saved a person’s life. I fell really honor and proud of my self to save Zack, It was a really great life experience, and I enjoy the time at the swimming pool. After the test, Mr. David let us swim around and play around with our friends. When I pulled Zack up, I thought that somebody will need to give him oxygen, and I know that’s not going to be me. It was really awesome.
After what he had been through, Zack promised me he will never lie to me again. He was very thankful, and grateful. After that, He learned that if he lies to people about stuff, he will have a bad consequence. Even better, we were closer after that. It was a very fun memory, I think I enjoy it the most.
Thứ Ba, 31 tháng 8, 2010
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For the truth, I didn't lie to him anything. Even my teacher knew that i can't swim.
Trả lờiXóanick, if you felt proud at that time, in the opposite, you were making fun of Zack..... :P
Trả lờiXóaBy the side, "honor" is one of the dead words and the last sentence suppose to be "Very funny memory,..." and "Funny" is also a dead words. Tee Hee :D
Trả lờiXóai meant dead word... :P
Trả lờiXóaI quite like your story, Nick, great job! You really know how to get people into the story, and there are some humorous parts that pretty much entertain the reader. But in the conclusion, you've talked about Zack's experience and lesson. So did you personally have any lesson by that experience though? Awesome one though :D
Trả lờiXóaNick this is so great. I love both your and Zack's versions of the story; they're both so humorous. They're so contrasting which makes them both better. They are both really good examples of how point of view (POV) can really change a story. Your descriptions were great, but always keep working on them. One can always improve their descriptiveness. The only thing I really want you to work on is developing your conclusion. You have a few lessons in it. I think you should develop the part about how it made you and Zack closer. Thanks for the great read.
Trả lờiXóaI agree w/ mr.pat... :D
Trả lờiXóaThank you so much Mr. Patrick, "ASURAN" Zack, and Lisa... I've learned a lot from my mistakes cause of you guys, i'll try to fix it and make it better in my final draft :)
Trả lờiXóaNICK! i remember the swimming test that Mr. David gave us and guess what! i'am the fastest swimmer! i beat Jerry up :P Nice story anyways man :)
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